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     Me,  Josh, and Ethan were standing behind pillars in the quad 6th grade waiting to randomly attack Dillon Kong where wouldn't see us coming. We all ran at him and then started laughing but then I think he got mad. He started to chase me under the breezeway but he wasn't that fast and the wind in my face felt really nice. I was just running in circles while Josh and Ethan were laughing. Then Dillon started sprinting and I looked back and then as I was turning around, everything went black.


     I was on the ground before I knew it and it took me a second to realize that I had ran into the brick column and that's why my head hurt so bad. Ethan and Josh showed up and looked shocked. I felt my head only to realize that there was a huge bump. everything from that moment on felt hazy. I felt like I was in a dream as I was being walked to the nurses' office. I got there and she told me that I had a concussion but to go to the doctor to make sure. Sure enough I had a concussion.

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  1. EvanJ's English1 Blog2August 31, 2017 at 11:21 AM

    Short Story grasps the idea of this event, but makes some poor word choices in the first paragraph. Those word choices make the read more strenuous.

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