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Narrative response




     I think that my personal narrative is definitely a work in progress but so far it is pretty good. I think that the writing small groups were very helpful and I got good, positive feedback on my narrative. Was told that my narrative had good vivid detail and I was glad because I know that that is something important in a personal narrative. I think that if I continue to improve and build on what I already have then it will become a very good narrative.

     I thought that the feedback I got on how to improve my narrative was even better. I was told to add dialogue which I am struggling with but I know that it will be a lot better. I was also told to describe what the best part about cross country was and I think that it will be an interesting direction for the narrative to go in instead of just naming all of the things that I like. I think that this feedback will make the difference in a good grade and a bad one.

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