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     Jake was on his back before he knew it when the flash of purple hit him. He immediately knew his reaction had worked. He felt the electricity buzzing around him and his lab caught flames and he just left as all of his assistants burned and tried to call for help trapped under all of the equipment. He ran out into the street and as he thrust his hand the Tacoma exploded in front of him. The SHDA ( Super Human Defense Agency) was there in minutes just as he had counted on when he ran over the plan in his head. As their cars rolled up, a huge fight erupted that endangered the lives of many civilians.
But just as abruptly as Jake had gotten powers, he was shot down to the street with a thud. Everyone just drove away and continued on like every normal day.

Comments

  1. SaadOctober 3, 2017 at 6:59 AM

    I liked the story, but it would be nice to have some information on his powers. Great job otherwise.

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  2. ThomasOctober 3, 2017 at 6:06 PM

    This is a very interesting story. Try to explain his powers a little more and why he wanted them.

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  3. Hooke21October 3, 2017 at 7:45 PM

    This sounds like a very interesting idea for a short story. I would try to give a little more background to help the reader know what is going on.

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  4. UnknownOctober 5, 2017 at 5:32 PM

    I really do like the story. The Science Fiction spin was very well planned out. I also enjoy that you had an abrupt ending like Harrison Bergeron.

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  5. NickHOctober 8, 2017 at 3:06 PM

    This story is really unique and cool. I like it!

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